Sitting before you, watching your fluids drain slowly into the thirsty dirt below, I feel nothing. You twitch in pain; agony the mate of your very soul. Once you were all that mattered to me. Once you were the light in my sky, the air I breathed, the blood I bled; now you are nothing. To scoff is beyond me, I have not enough emotion in my chilled heart to bear you ill will. Your fall, the fall of all before my eyes, has left me nothing but a hollow shell. No echo of crashing waves, no wondrous Alabaster beauty, just jagged shards remain to rend and tear the soles of those unfortunate enough to tread where I now lie. Yes, a lie – one that stole my humanity and brought me to your side on this dark night, moonlight glinting off the dagger in my hand. Staring into your dazed eyes, indifference is all I feel. Apathy is all my abandoned faith will allow me to embrace as I watch the final breath expel from your body.
© Copyright 2013 Nina D’Arcangela. All Rights Reserved.
I’m doing the 2013 Blogging from A to Z Challenge! Pop back everyday but Sunday through the month of April for a new letter prompt to spawn my deranged ramblings! ;}
April 1st, 2013 at 7:27 am
I loved this piece, especially the contrast between such a passionate act as murder, and the apathy the author feels when regarding the victim. I also love the idea of the A-Z Challenge; can’t wait to read the rest!
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April 1st, 2013 at 2:59 pm
Hi Karen! Thank you. I was going for conflicting emotion with no emotion at all (hmm…?). LOL – I loved the idea of the betrayal, induced apathy, and what ultimately (in my mind) was needed to seal her heart forever. I’m very glad you enjoyed it!
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April 1st, 2013 at 7:50 am
Whoa! Great imagery: “your fluids drain slowly into the thirsty dirt” I really like this post. Very heartfelt and truly vivid!
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April 1st, 2013 at 3:02 pm
Hi Jack! Thank you! I am a very visual/emotive writer; if I can’t see it happen in my head, and feel what the characters of the tale feel, then I’m useless. But I was very pleased with this piece, and am happy to have conveyed the heavy emotion through my short prose. Thank you for visiting, and for the wonderful comment!
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April 1st, 2013 at 8:26 am
You really can write, Nina: your choice of the right words, and talent for description and conveying emotion are amazing. Great job!
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April 1st, 2013 at 3:05 pm
Hi Stephen! Thank you very much! Sometimes, the shorter pieces torture me much more than the longer ones, but this piece wrote itself. The imagery was front and center in my mind, with only one possible outcome. I genuinely appreciate the compliment, and hope you’ll stop back again. Thank you!
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April 1st, 2013 at 9:27 am
This is full of emotion and great discriptions!
Dani @ Entertaining Interests
#warriorminion
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April 1st, 2013 at 3:09 pm
Hi Dani! Thank you, I’m at my best when writing with heavy, dark emotion. Ironically, Apathy is the opposite of all that… Thank you again!
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April 1st, 2013 at 10:44 am
This was great, Nina. I love the idea of an ABC of horror.
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April 1st, 2013 at 3:12 pm
Hi Jamie! I’m glad you enjoyed this short post! I’m always most comfortable writing of death for some reason (call me Damned – yes, I’m chuckling to myself), it seems to come very naturally to me. Thank you very much for the compliment!! I’ll be doing A to Z all month, but it won’t all be horror, angst or pain driven… I hope you’ll enjoy the other posts as well! ~ Nina 🙂
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April 1st, 2013 at 1:56 pm
I hope you never get angry with me… JK That was amazing and caused me to feel a bit fearful for my safety considering you wrote it in second person. I kept wondering what I did wrong.
See you tomorrow,
Jana @ A Novel Reality
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April 1st, 2013 at 3:17 pm
Hi Jana! Thank you for stopping by, and for complimenting my A post! Fear not, only my writing is dark (and mildly psychotic), I’m actually a bubbly person. Not all of my posts will be dark and heavy, I write in many voices, this (be it good or bad) is the one closest to my natural ‘writer’s voice’.
Thanks again, look forward to seeing you tomorrow!
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April 1st, 2013 at 2:22 pm
Nice. I always encourage my students to help their reader visualize and you have done a fantastic job at that… although sadly, they might be a little scared 🙂
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April 1st, 2013 at 3:46 pm
Hi Jean! Thank you! Being very emotive, I tend to write with a great deal of description (sometimes too much). I’m sorry it might frighten some, but secretly very pleased to hear it is effective enough to do so. Thanks again! 😉
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April 1st, 2013 at 4:58 pm
You never cease to amaze me, Nina…and your prose never ceases to snare me by the throat. You always have my full attention when you write. This was outstanding, a powerful punch of a paragraph. Any more or any less would have diminished it; as usual, you know how to steer that dark pen of yours…
Thank you for sharing! 🙂
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April 1st, 2013 at 9:17 pm
Thank you Joe! I’m so very pleased to know that my ‘snippet’ wasn’t a disappointment for lack of length; nor that it lacked impact! I’ll be writing a varied bunch of styles from morbid to playful to crass, to the emotive prose most of my pieces are written in during this blogging challenge. Here’s to hoping they surprise and delight, and aren’t a let down! 😀
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April 1st, 2013 at 5:01 pm
Whoaa… that’s a powerful one. I really loved your post. 🙂
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April 1st, 2013 at 9:13 pm
Thank you! I try to deliver as much emotion as possible with each piece, large or small, and I’m very pleased to know it comes through! 🙂
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April 1st, 2013 at 5:27 pm
Wow…this is indeed a sweet revenge verse…a fine write IMHO.
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April 1st, 2013 at 9:11 pm
Thank you most kindly! I seem to flow my best when writing about death… My inner voice/muse seems to lean in that direction. Thanks again!! 🙂
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April 1st, 2013 at 7:21 pm
You have such an amazing skill to pack a Mike Tyson punch is such tiny packages.
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April 1st, 2013 at 9:06 pm
Thank you Hunter! No ear eating though, that’s just yucky! LOL
Thank you again for complimenting my writing! There will be a lot of different styles popping up in this challenge, I hope I don’t disappoint!
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April 1st, 2013 at 8:43 pm
That was powerful!
And I read and respond to every comment, no matter how many. I appreciate anyone who takes the time to visit me!
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April 1st, 2013 at 9:04 pm
Thank you – not only for appreciating my writing, but for responding to the comment. It must feel like a full time job! I’m very grateful for the visit and the comment. Thank you! 🙂
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April 1st, 2013 at 9:20 pm
Found you through the A to Z Challenge. Very powerful writing. Can’t wait to read more!
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April 2nd, 2013 at 12:13 pm
Hi Rebecca! I’m glad you found me through the A to Z challenge. I’ve been finding a lot of interesting blogs out there. Thanks for enjoying my short piece! 🙂
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April 1st, 2013 at 10:25 pm
This is great!
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April 2nd, 2013 at 12:33 pm
Thank you!! 🙂
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April 2nd, 2013 at 1:57 pm
Awesome Nina!
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April 2nd, 2013 at 2:15 pm
Thank you! 🙂
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