Inside – Day 4
They are larger now, no longer simply sliding through the minute fissures of my head. I feel a piercing pain with each stab of their clawed legs as they dig in and they drag themselves forward. I can barely inhale for the number of them clinging to the walls of my throat. Coughing blood and eight legged bodies, I feel them holding on with their barbed legs so as not to get ejected with each contraction of my body.
Swallow or vomit my only choices, I grab a bottle of water from my nightstand and begin to gulp the warm water. I can feel it sluicing over their swollen bodies like lesions grown from my esophagus, not just the intruders that they are. I vomit more, pulling one or two free to expel them onto the bed. The others grasp tighter, puncturing the delicate pink tissue of my already mutilated gullet. These seem different, more frantic as they dance about on the bed. Their color more flush, darker – their bodies harder in form. Clearly blind, they dart in sporadic circles, slowly growing more sluggish, more translucent, collapsing like the first one I saw.
It seems they die quickly, they don’t seem to survive long outside my body.
Things most would choose to look away from…
Come with me over the next week, as I spin my tale for Coffin Hop 2012. This will be a story told day by day – on the final day, encapsulated into one post.
In honor of the tour, I’ll be giving away a goodie per day to one random recipient who leaves a comment on each post. My prizes will come in the form of e-books, print copies, eZines, and an unending subscription to The Sirens Call eZine as well. (plus there may be a rubber duckie or two) All prizes will be randomly selected on November 1st, as per the Coffin Hop guidelines found here on my Coffin Hop 2012 page, along with a list of the other bloggers. Please don’t forget to visit the Coffin Hop Blog for news, updates, delirious ramblings, and magnificent posts from the other bloggers as well!
October 27th, 2012 at 2:39 pm
am enjoying reading the story! i can’t wait to see what happens
October 27th, 2012 at 11:45 pm
Hi Laurie – I’m glad you’re enjoying it! 🙂
October 27th, 2012 at 2:55 pm
Deliciously disturbing! For some reason, I have associated the protagonist’s creepy invaders with Swedish Fish candy. I am not sure I’ll ever feel the same about Swedish Fish…
Happy Coffin Hopping!
October 27th, 2012 at 11:49 pm
Aniko, thank you for the compliment and continuing to read my little twist! … and I think you just took Swedish Fish of my list of sinful enjoyables indefinitely! LOL
Happy Hopping to you as well!! ;}
October 27th, 2012 at 7:19 pm
Hi, Nina. there’s no way I’m going to get through 100 plus blogs if I have to read a lot on each one, but am I so glad I went back the four days and read your story up to this point. Very well done. It is as gripping as the creepy parasites that have taken hold of your character’s body. I will definitely come back for more of this.
October 28th, 2012 at 12:06 am
Hi Jimmy, Thank you! I’m honored to know that you went back to Day 1 to start my demented yarn. I know how hard it is just making it to one post on each blog per day, let alone 4 posts on a single blog. Much appreciated! I’ll admit, I may have fallen for my little brain buddies in this one… in that very wonderfully warped sort of way!
Happy Hopping to you too! ;}
October 28th, 2012 at 2:50 pm
Holding my neck as I read this, Nina…. 🙂
October 28th, 2012 at 9:06 pm
LOL – are they crawling around in your throat too Joe? ;}
October 29th, 2012 at 8:31 pm
Still hanging in here….on the fine line between revulsion and horror.
October 30th, 2012 at 4:18 pm
Perfect! That’s exactly where you should be at this point! ;}